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CARTER'S QUESTION.
How do you hyperlink something to a new page like you did? (picture taken by VBPastore) We are writing about: **__ Geoffrey Crogan __**

Strawberry and Carter's page

This page used for planning and discussion; the drafting page for Strawberry and Carter is here.

19.Strawberry's Plan

 * Characters**: Geoffrey (marksman)
 * Location**:Secret hideout
 * Goal:** To disguise himself by having a mohican and hopes the deputy don't find him.
 * Impediment**: The enemies find Geoffrey by following him in the woods.
 * Solution**:Make a secret tunnel in a cave for his escape but make a trap for the deputy on the way out.

Hope you like it Carter!

P.S. You can change it if you want!

20.Carter reply
I do like it! Back then though, I think the police would be called a "deputy" or "sheriff" Who are the enemies?

Frame story:First draft
"Go on, tell me where you got that hairstyle!"

Eric's best friend, John, had a mohican, which Eric thought was an extraordinary hairstyle.

"I really want one!'

"How should I know where I got it from!"shouted John.

"Fine! I'll do it completely by myself without any of YOUR help, John!"

Eric's eyes didn't move a muscle, he decided that he was going to go straight home and start cutting off his hair. When he came home, he couldn't find a shaver and also could't find any scissors! Eric wanted that hairstyle, and soon, but it was almost supper so he had to go to drastic measures. He started plucking his hair! After 30 full minutes, he was bleeding a little and only plucked about 100 hairs. So he looks everywhere for scissors and finds them in his top drawer. After thinking a while about how much his head hurts and how dumb he was for not looking hard enough before, he started cutting.

"Eric!"shouted Dad up the stairs.

"What are you doing? It's supper."

Eric ran straight down, slowed down before the last step, and walked slow and proud as he headed toward the dining room table as his family stared without moving a limb. Eric sat down like nothing had changed.

Dad's face went red, his eyes buldged out, and his mouth gaped in horror, but then, he suddenly started to laugh,( along with the rest of the family.)

"What are you laughing at? It's not that funny!" yelling Eric. With tears bursting from his dad's eyes from laughing so hard, he said " I'm... I'm so sorry! (giggles whispered in the background) ha....he.... It just looks..he...looks so strange!"

Eric became mad and expressed it with a simple face expression. His dad suddenly noticed he was mad and stopped laughing immediately, he said " Now wait just a second, don't start to whine, how about I tell you a story about one of my ancestors that just came into mind from that hair style of yours." Eric's face expression changed immediately with open ears.

15.Carter's reply
I've revised your frame story but which of the Crogan family members did you pick? Oh, and in America, we call a mohican a "mohawk". The Mohicans or Mohegans were the actual Indians, while the warriors wore their hair in a Mohawk style. media type="custom" key="5987327"

1. About Carter
Hey! I am TOTALLY new to all of this so I have no idea how to write to you the right way. Is this the way to do this? I clicked on "edit this page" and wrote this. could you give me an idea if this is correct or not? ( write me on the this thing: "EDIT THIS PAGE", the thing i am on now for the answer. OH! I am a guy, not a girl and Carter is my real name, not a pen name. :)

P.S. I think it is really cool that you are in another continent and that you are probably watching T.V by the time I start school. I would probably say your lucky, but I am asleep when you are still in school so I'm pretty lucky too. :) lol

2. About Strawberry
Hi, my name is **Strawberry**. I am **10 years old** and live in **Ealing in London** with my Brother, my Mum and my Dad. I live in a very quiet street with loads of friendly people. My hobbies are **ballet, tap, modern and national**. My favourite things about school are **sports, dance and playtime.** I also have some questions for you.

Which part of California do you come from? How old are you? Do you have any siblings? Who do you live with?

3. About Carter
If you go to the side bar of this page under "pupil pages" that says "Have a Go!" It will show where I live. you can move the map around with your mouse find a closer location of where I am. Go north of the salt and sea and I live in Indio. I am 12 years old because our school age system is different then yours. I am the youngest and I have 1 brother (middle child) that is 14 years old and a sister (oldest) that is 17. I live with my mom,dad,brother, and sister. ​Do you know of any words that we say that you don't?

4. About Strawberry
We say holiday instead of vacation and we say football instead of soccer. That is all I can think of right now.

5. Strawberry's brainstorms on Crogans

 * Peter Crogan**- lost in desert, sandstorm,English mistaken for French
 * Benjamin Crogan-** lying in middle of sea because of flood, finds a box, keeps it, turns into smuggler.

6. Strawberry's plans
1. There is a flood and Benjamin is pushed into the middle of the sea. 2. Benjamin doesn't know what to do until he finds a box that looks like a treasure box. 3. Is it worth taking it? 4. Benjamin picks it up and decides that if he starts smuggeling then he would earn alot of precious money. 5. The one problem was that he didn't know how to get out of the sea, especially when he was in the middle. End it on a cliffhanger.
 * Benjamin Crogan-**

P.S. I will wright the rest later.

7. Carter's reply and Idea's
Very great idea! Did your teacher tell you to pick that exact person? I have no problem with the person you chose and I thought your idea for the person is great, I just thought we could think of our top 5 people we want to write about and if we agree with someone, we could write about them... if you teacher told you to to do that person, that's fine. How about I write my 5 favorite people that I would want to write about, and YOU do your 5 people you would want to write about and if someone on our list matches up, we will write about that person. ( Tell me if you like the idea or not. ) Here is my top 5 people:

Crogan-Junichi, Ninja Daniel Crogan, Lion Tamer,escape artist K. Alexander Crogan, secret agent Joseph Crogan, Diamand miner Geoffrey Crogan, Marksman Thank you!

8.Strawberry's reply
My teacher didn't tell me to do that particular Crogan. Lets go by what you said about the 5 favourite people thing. Thank you!

9.Carter's questions
Cool! Are any people on my list that you are really interested in? If none of my choices are one of your picks, maybe you could show me your list of people that you want to write about and I would be happy to choose from your list. If I do have any people that you like on my list, then that's great! (who do you pick if you chose someone on my list)

10.Carter's reply to the audio
Ok! So if I heard it right, You are going to write the rough draft and we are going to edit it? Is #6 Strawberry's plans the draft or are you going to write it later?

11.Strawberry's reply
I don't think I will write the rest later!

12. Carter's reply
I'm so sorry I have not replied! I've been doing some research and I'm still on it... I will work on the "plan" soon.

13. Strawberry's reply to the questions
I am quite interested in the marksman.

14. Carter's Excuse and reply.
I was so sick on friday so I wasn't able to reply. Sorry! Yet, I've done a lot of research on the diamand miner so I'm not quite sure what to do. I will try to do some research on marksman facts and choose but I'm still leaning toward the diamand miner.

16.Carter's Question
Hey! I have been editing your flame story a little bit more but I nor others have not recieved any replies. Please try to reply as soon as you can.

17.Strawberry's reply
I think that the re- draft of the frame story is very good!

18.Carter's reply
Thank you so much! But I still need to know about which crogan member you are writing about and when you are going to write the "plan draft"