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 * We are writing about Joseph Crogan!**

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This page used for planning and discussion; the drafting page for Agent O'Crackerknuckles and Funnyboy is here.

Full Plan for story
Characters: Eric Crogan (before my plan starts), Mr Crogan, Joseph Crogan, Head of mine, Canary.

Location: Diamond mine, Africa

Beginning

Joseph Crogan is a poor shop keeper who wants to get his hands on a diamond (this will help him become rich) only available in Africa so he goes undercover. He tells the strict mine owner, Mr Whip, that he is and journalist who can advertise his diamonds. Mr Whip lets him go down. He makes his way underground for his first attempt at finding the diamond. His lamp turns out and he gets hopelessly lost.

Middle

He feels something on his shoulder, a Canary. He hopes this will help him find his way out. He tries feeling his way along the wall but gives up hope after a few hours. He sits down and soon after that the Canary falls off his shoulder- dead. He remembers what his father, Mathew Crogan told him about Canary's dying. There is gas in the mine!

In the end That's good

He desperately tries to get out when he hears a loud gunshot noise and the mine begins to collapse. He doesn't manage to get out on time and his blood is splattered on a rock which one thousand years later is on display in THE BRITISH MUSEUM, LONDON.

Description of Crogan house
I did a description of a Crogan character. Because we haven't decided yet, I just did Joseph Crogan, the diamond miner:

The wooden house stood on thick shoots of bamboo, the rotting wood barely holding the tin roof up. The house was barely visible in the overgrown location made up of long grass, thick vines and trees twisted in odd positions. WILL CONTINUE LATER...

Frame story:First Draft
//Hi Funnyboy! I wrote a frame story. Feel free to change it and make it better!//

"Bye Percy, come again," Eric mumbled, closing the door behind his friend. He turned to face his dad, who was glaring at him with vicious eyes.

"What were you thinking, letting your friend use my razor? In fact, why did you even let him in my room?" Dad growled.

Eric felt the bald patch on his head where his eyebrow should have been. His Dad's mouth was fixed into a scowl. The veins on the back of his hands bulged and his face turned a darker shade of pink.

"It's not my fault, Dad! Percy wanted to test it and I can't say no. Not to Percy. He wouldn't be my friend anymore!" Eric said fiddling with his dark wavy hair.

"Did you think about that before inviting him over?" Dad's forehead was creased.

Eric stared at the floor: "Sorry Dad."

Mr Crogan sighed: "It's OK. I did the same thing when I was kid. And apparently so did your ancestor (....) Crogan!

Eric smiled: "Really?"

"Yes, I'll tell you about it..."

The Crogan adventure begins...

About Agent O'Crackerknuckles
Hello Funnyboy, I am ** Agent O'Crackerknuckles **and I live in Chiswick, London, England, UK, Europe, Earth. I love Swimming, Rockclimbing, playing Piano and going on holiday. My favourite things at school are: Playtime, English and P.E. My favourite movie is **The Simpsons**. I like shopping with my friends aswell. I have a dog called Raffles and two brothers. I am the only girl. When you read this, I will probably be asleep. I am left handed. Nobody else in my class is. I have some questions for you....


 * 1) Are you a girl or a boy?
 * 2) What do you like doing?
 * 3) What music do you like?
 * 4) Do you have any brothers or sisters?

About funnyboy
Hello Agent O'Crackernuckles I am funnyboy I live in Regina Sask Canada on Earth milky way I like swimming going to the beach playing with my friends video games riding bikes. My favourite thing at school are: gym arts ed and science. My favourite movie is Avatar. I have a pet I am a boy I am Left handed too the Nobody else is but one in my class. I have no questions at all.

Reply
Hi again! More about me:
 * I like going to the cinema and seeing 3D films. (I like Avatar too)
 * I am 11 years old.
 * I have blondish- brownish hair and blue eyes
 * I like reading and jumping on my trampoline and playing with my dog.
 * When I grow up I'm going to be a professional skydiver.

Crogan Story ideas
Here are my ideas for the Crogan story:

Daniel Crogan- Escape artist and lion tamer:

1. Gets new assistant 2. Works on best ever trick 3. Big night 4. Assistant gets nervous and does the sword trick wrong 5. Daniel is dead

Joseph Crogan- Diamond miner:

1. He is a spy sent by his boss to retrieve a diamond 2. Goes undercover 3. Goes down mine- gets lost in the dark 4. Boulder falls on his leg, breaking it. 5. No hope of escape. Slowly dies.

Geoffrey Crogan- Assassin:

1. Assassin boss sends him to kill someone. 2. He realizes that the 'someone' is his wife but only he knows. 3. He goes and pretends to kill her but he doesn't. 4. A fellow assassin turns his back on Geoffrey and tells boss the truth. 5. Geoffrey and his wife are shipped to a stranded island with wild animals to keep them company.

Have you got any ideas?

Personally I would like to do the diamond miner but I think we could make my story idea a little more interesting. Let me know.

We should do the diamond miner if you what to.

Is there a Crogan character that you want to do or do you not mind. I don't mind = = _ocation;

Story Idea
Joseph crogan Diamond miner c. 1893 characters:Eric crogan,Dr.crogan,Joseph crogan,Tyler smith,and Sarha smith Location:Africa and the Great Mine 1.Eric and Sarha get in trouble 2.Mr.Crogan tells a story to them about Joseph crogan and Tyler smith =**start of the story:**=

"Hey Eric we should quickly cross" said sara "no way Sara I am not going to be in trouble again" said Eric come on Eric fine. Hey kids come here now or I will call the police not again. Eric crogan yes dad and Sara smith let me tell you two a story about Joseph crogan and Tyler smith in a mine crew." Joseph" what you should go to a mine crew in Africa why just go and take this object okay but how "take a airplane to many question bye" hay tickets where is the close airport oh right there I need to go to Africa okay sir go through the the scaner first with your bags. yes I am here hay you is diamond miner crew here I don't know ask him is there a d......... yes there is over there at a shop walk forward then turn to your left. Hay why are you here in my shop I want to join your diamond miner crew can I yes yes you can come back here 8 sharp am now get lost.

QUICK QUESTION: Who is Sara Smith and Tyler Smith- I need to know when I redraft it. Thanks. Sara is Eric's new best friend and Tyler is a guy that Joseph meets. Thanks!