Vengeance+drafting

toc I've just been told that only the actual story on this page and all the drafting is for the other page. Sorry!!! XD


 * Pemlington's frame story**

"This is such a cool basement!” cried Casy, the hairs on the back of her neck rising slighty in the excitement of the wonderful room. "Be quite!” spat Eric, his great mop of hair getting damper and damper with sticky sweat. "Whoa! I'm a ghost!” shrieked Justin, pulling a grimy piano cover over his head. Eric's clamped teeth were a vice: he had heard his Dad's Doctor Martins clunk down the rusted rickety stairs. Eric saw his Dad's eyes were bulging like a shopaholic's wardrobe. "Eric!” bellowed Eric's Dad. "I'm sorry Dad," muttered Eric, looking around in dismay to find Casy and Jason had hidden. "Listen Eric, this can't keep happening. Come here,” said Eric's Dad, inviting him to come and sit down next to him on the steps. " Dad, I'm really sorry," Eric said, hanging his head in shame. " I forgive you, but don't do it again" Eric's Dad looked at Eric straight in the eyes and whispered:” You remind me of*Catfoot Crogan*. You have the same eyes as him." "Go on tell me!" said Eric, forgetting Casy and Justin were still there. "Only if you promise you won't ever do this again." " I promise,” said Eric, crossing his heart. "In the 1700's..."


 * Ovechickn's first draft**

These are some ideas for a few of the crogans Charles crogan is in the Britian army base and the Americans attack the base so Charles Crogan goes to get help for Englend agents the Americans.Charles starts in front of the army to try and stop them but they had to much bad blood agents the Americans so Charles went with them but did not kill any one because he ran back to the base were he was safe for some time but some Germans got past the Britain army and found Crogan unarmed so they took him hostige but they forced him to tell them were the Britain army was going so he told them were they were going so the Americans set Crogan free he went back to the base but he was armed with a butter knife but that was not enought agents the American because he was armed they took him to a secret base were no one could find him but he told him he was puting the butter knife away because he had toast in his hand with butter on it but they did not belive him so they did a test on the knife and they said sorry to crogan but they took him back to the base in the open and they had a gun but they did not shoot him when they got up closer he realized that they where Brithish but they still took him Hostige because he was in Americans army outfit the Americans swithed his outfit so they did a test and he was a Britain so they gave him a new outfit it was really cool because it was different then all the other ones so they took him to the American base and the Americans got killed because he brought in the Britain soldiers and killed them and took over the American base and turned it in to a Britain base so the Americans only have the secret base and crogan took them to it but they had many soldiers in the seceret base and the Britain took the hole army with them to take over the secret base and that will end the war but it did not turn out like that but the American herd the plan and retaliaided agents them and the battle started lots of men died from both sides but the Britans thought they won the battle but then the Americans leader Penelope Hickman and the Americans had more soilders then before so they ran but the war is still there the Britian soilders had more arttilary then the Americans it was scary but the Britian army was really scared that they were going to lose but the Americans started to retreat but the Britian is attacking it was going like that for afew years later the war was still going on but there is some help for the Britian and England the Russians were coming to help and that ended the war because the russians drop bombs from there Steath bomber. But then the Ukraines help the Americans and the war went on the americans captured Charles and william Crogan but they evacuate the fort but it was to late then the Americans shot Charles again and again in tell he droped to the ground.And that is the story of Charles and William Crogan. _


 * My version of your story**

"Everyone escape! Evacuate the fort! We are under attack!” bellowed Charles Crogan, swinging his arm in desperation to the nearest exit. The stomping of Wellington boots against the mud made a squelching sound. The fort was disgusting: lice were crawling everywhere on both alive and dead bodies and in camp. The stench of unwashed cloths and human beings hang in the air like a coat on a peg. Everything cried out for tender loving care. When Charles Crogan felt the muddy walls he got a shock as they were so freezing. It was a huge effort to got go to the lavatory in the evening as it was so dark. “You’re not going anywhere you English scum!”muttered a mystirious figure from the darkness apered gagging and blind folding Charles.